Date: Sep 30, 2011 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 5
Great fic, could do with a beta reader but compared to other ESL fan fic writers it was really well done, well structured and with proper english, just a few spelling and grammer mistakes here and there.
Thanks for a great read.
Date: Dec 19, 2010 05:42 am Title: Chapter 5
My first taste of fiction on this website and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Your writing has the perfect amount of detail and expresses the emotions in such a way where it's not painfully obvious.
I particularly liked how you dealt with Merin's thoughts in the aftermath of the rape because I could almost feel the desperation and self-loathing rolling off him and how it still effects him weeks after. In other stories I've read the character has been perfectly back to normal within the week so spot on with this.
In a word: brilliant.