Date: Jul 04, 2009 01:50 am Title: Chapter 16
This was great fun to read (though apparently less so for the poor characters that had to live through it).
There were some instances where some details didn't seem consistent--the extent of their injuries and the things they did regardless. But, other than those rare times, this was very good. The characters were nicely on point, the dialogue flowed and the adventure was very effectively drawn out. It was nice to see a counterpoint between action and introspective, which was displayed here. Besides which, I liked the plot of the fic itself, good twists.